Title: SEE YOU THEN, JOSHUA JACOBS
Genre: Contemporary MG
Pitch:
Soon-to-be seventh grader Suzie Martin is happy to find a friend in the new boy in the neighborhood, science prodigy Joshua Jacobs. He makes friendship – something Suzie’s never quite gotten the hang of – look easy. She looks forward to a great year, until she learns Joshua believes his dead father visits him through time travel.
As the news spreads, she must decide whether to stand by a friend she doesn’t believe even if it means losing her newfound acceptance at school, standing up to the school bully, and defying her own family. In a few short months, Suzie learns more about friendship, fear, hope and the spacetime continuum than she ever thought possible.
First sentence:
There was nothing about you, your mother or the moving truck to warn me about what to expect from you, Joshua Jacobs.
The pitch is cool (though if JJ's dad really is time travelling then it's not a contemporary).
ReplyDeleteI was a bit put off by the first sentence with the use of the word 'you.' Is it a diary entry? Why is the narration talking to a character?
There was nothing about him, his mother or the moving truck to warn me about what to expect from Joshua Jacobs. works way better for me.
Judge comment: I love the bit about the space time continuum. You might try reading the entire thing out loud, however -- the story isn't confusing but the way it's written makes it a little hard to follow. I'm also wondering if the second paragraph needs a little more punch. What sets this "learning a lesson" story apart from all the others?
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