Sunday, February 23, 2014

Entry #71 - SWORN

Title: SWORN

Genre: NA Contemporary Fantasy


Deep in the Rocky Mountains, college student Kai Monahan watches in awe as a dozen dragons—actual freaking dragons—battle beneath a fat, white moon. When one crashes nearly dead at her feet and transforms into a man, Kai does the only thing a decent person could: grabs the nearest sword and saves his life. As the man/dragon, Rhys, recovers from his wounds, an accidental brush of skin against skin binds him inextricably to Kai, but she isn’t about to give up her future because of a mythological creature with a hormone imbalance.

Kai soon learns there’s more at stake than her freedom. Rhys and his companions have an enemy who plans to pit dragonkind against humanity in a clash that could decimate both. Kai must decide if her freedom is worth risking Rhys’s life; a life more crucial to the fate of both species than she can possibly guess.

First sentence:

Kai stood at the brink of the precipice, the toes of her worn hiking boots hanging over the edge.


  1. This is one of the strongest pitches in the mix, I think, and I'm glad you didn't change it much. I love the world-building you do, the threads of voice woven in, and the spark of humor that tells me YES, this is a book I definitely want to curl up with.

  2. I am intrigued! I want to know more about this one! Hope to read it someday!

  3. Your opening imagery in the pitch is strong. Then you quickly get busy feeding the reader your MC, her initial problem, an apparent love interest, and even a bit of humor. I honestly don't have much to add. You've intrigued me. Nicely done! Best of luck.


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