tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5090356376347540893.post805416612998804452..comments2023-06-24T08:30:59.493-04:00Comments on Adventures in YA Contests from: Entry #69 - THE LAST FLOCKMartina Boonehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03358736828122139189noreply@blogger.comBlogger5125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5090356376347540893.post-52115076564367798532014-02-27T00:30:28.397-05:002014-02-27T00:30:28.397-05:00Those word counts can cause havoc! Mine is #49 :)Those word counts can cause havoc! Mine is #49 :)SM Johnstonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03546994863993080465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5090356376347540893.post-60110160125433364562014-02-26T20:32:04.157-05:002014-02-26T20:32:04.157-05:00SM, thanks for reading and for your thoughts! If I...SM, thanks for reading and for your thoughts! If I had a couple more words I would definitely put back in "fellow shelter-dweller" to explain Lucas - darn 150 word count limit! Which pitch is yours?<br /><br />Judge 1, thanks for your thoughts as well. I'm happy to hear you would keep reading!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08922892814555571705noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5090356376347540893.post-23134044403967783062014-02-26T20:09:14.412-05:002014-02-26T20:09:14.412-05:00This comment has been removed by the author.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08922892814555571705noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5090356376347540893.post-76198565753111861812014-02-26T17:43:53.416-05:002014-02-26T17:43:53.416-05:00This is a very tight, high concept pitch and premi...This is a very tight, high concept pitch and premise. The dystopian market is so crowded that the writing will really have to deliver to stand out from the pack. That means the twist had better be a true surprise, or it will feel like we've read this one before! Obviously, that's not going to be in the first sentence, but I would certainly keep reading to find out. Good luck!AYAP Judge 1https://www.blogger.com/profile/16182849395867360908noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5090356376347540893.post-55980209249694287122014-02-26T02:19:24.897-05:002014-02-26T02:19:24.897-05:00I find this pitch enthralling, but I wonder why it...I find this pitch enthralling, but I wonder why it's speculative fiction as there's no hint of it there. It sounds more like a thriller. Speculative fiction usually is set in an alternative universe/history or combines multiple genres under the speculative fiction umbrella (fantasy, scifi, horror etc). <br /><br />I think you also need to clarify Lucas as he's just a name thrown in at the moment. Maybe:<br /><br />...even falling in love with fellow survivor-in-hiding, Lucas, comes with a price. <br /><br />Best of luck.SM Johnstonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03546994863993080465noreply@blogger.com