tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5090356376347540893.post1459664117137499975..comments2023-06-24T08:30:59.493-04:00Comments on Adventures in YA Contests from: Entry 20: HARD TO BREATHEMartina Boonehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03358736828122139189noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5090356376347540893.post-78206547630985160662014-02-21T14:59:53.086-05:002014-02-21T14:59:53.086-05:00I so love the use of the app (that's really di...I so love the use of the app (that's really different). I second Kimberly I didn't quite understand why he would use the app if he hated his father. rena traxelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09984425188567295761noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5090356376347540893.post-37672701600794378662014-02-21T07:08:43.069-05:002014-02-21T07:08:43.069-05:00I like this--it's really different. Good luck!...I like this--it's really different. Good luck!HEATHER LYNNE DAVIShttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04324491728569039272noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5090356376347540893.post-10834763566814580222014-02-20T18:45:05.195-05:002014-02-20T18:45:05.195-05:00Such a cool concept! I'm left with a huge ques...Such a cool concept! I'm left with a huge question though. If he hates his father so much he won't ask for an update of the app, why on earth did he accept and use it in the first place? Having a bit of trouble sorting it out in my head. Clarifying Mo's motivations would really cement the pitch. Congrats on what sounds like a fab story!Kimberly Vanderhorsthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01653757517652257445noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5090356376347540893.post-88335988266282235872014-02-20T07:02:48.744-05:002014-02-20T07:02:48.744-05:00What I like: I like idea of an app giving powers.
...What I like: I like idea of an app giving powers.<br /><br />What I would like: I feel a bit unsure about Mo and what he wants.<br /><br />Great work!<br />Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com